睇睇下文有冇咩grammar問題

古都

各位大大

In Hong Kong, there’s got different kinds of transports. This time, we would introduce Franchise bus, one of the most common transports in Hong Kong.

In fact, it may produce lots of pollutant when they’re working; on the other hand, it can provide ‘stop-to-stop’ service, which other main transportation system such as railway cannot do it.

In this project, we would like to introduce the advantages and disadvantages of franchise bus. Also, we did a research on people taking franchise bus habitat. Of course, we feel glad that we can do a comparative between franchise bus and MTR, which is another common transport in Hong Kong.

At last, hope you’ll enjoy reading this project.

thanks

[ 本帖最後由 古都 於 2007-10-24  11:05 PM 編輯 ]

fatting

In Hong Kong,there are different kinds of transport.Now we would like to introduce Franchise bus,one of the common transport in hong kong.

It will pollution problems when they are operated.However ,they can provide stop-to-stop service,which other main transport such as railway cannot do so.

in this project,we would like to find out the advantages and disadvantages of franchise bus. We did a research about taking franchise bus habitat. undoubtedly, we feel honored that we can compete MTR, which is another common transport in Hong Kong.

可唔可以比D意見?

Keith

原帖由 古都 於 2007-10-24  09:49 PM 發表
各位大大

In Hong Kong, there are different kinds of transport. This time, we would introduce (the) Franchise bus, one of the most common transports in Hong Kong.

In fact, it may produce lots of pollutant when it's working; on the other hand, it provides ‘stop-to-stop’ service, which other main transportation system such as railway cannot do.

In this project, we would like to introduce the advantages and disadvantages of franchise bus. Also, we did a research on the people's habit of using franchise bus service. Of course, we are glad that we can do a comparison between franchise bus and MTR, which is another common transport in Hong Kong.

At last, we hope you’ll enjoy reading this project.

thanks

有錯請指正
部分字眼有更好選擇
仲有係Grammar唔係Grammer

原帖由 fatting 於 2007-10-24  10:42 PM 發表
In Hong Kong,there are different kinds of transport.Now we would like to introduce Franchise bus,one of the common transport in hong kong.

It will cause pollution problems when they operate.However ,they can provide stop-to-stop service,which other main transport such as railway cannot do so.

in this project,we would like to find out the advantages and disadvantages of franchise bus. We did a research about taking franchise bus habitat(如果原文指習慣的話, 應該係Habit). undoubtedly, we feel honored that we can compare MTR, which is another common transport in Hong Kong.

可唔可以比D意見?

[ 本帖最後由 Keith 於 2007-10-24  11:02 PM 編輯 ]

古都

集思廣益
多謝大家

古都

原帖由 Keith 於 2007-10-24  10:58 PM 發表

有錯請指正
部分字眼有更好選擇
仲有係Grammar唔係Grammer

係喎
thx,已改

fatting

其實咩叫franchise bus?
habitat 係咪解生境(動物住既region)

死火la....大耐冇做writing, [It will pollution problems] 打少個字都睇唔到

dtclaw

原帖由 Keith 於 2007-10-24  10:58 PM 發表

各位大大

In Hong Kong, there are different kinds of transport. This time, we will introduce (the) Franchise bus, one of the most common transports in Hong Kong.

In fact, it may emit many pollutants when it is operating; on the other hand, it provides ‘stop-to-stop’ service, which other main transportation systems such as the railway cannot do(無必要).

In this project, we would like to introduce the advantages and disadvantages of the franchise buses. Also, we did a research on the people's habit of using franchise bus service. Of course, we are glad that we can do a comparison between the franchise bus and the MTR, which is another common form of transport in Hong Kong.

Finally, we hope you will enjoy reading this project.

thanks

寫project essay避免使用縮寫
其實內容上尚有改進空間

[ 本帖最後由 dtclaw 於 2007-10-25  10:20 AM 編輯 ]

choy991044

原帖由 古都 於 2007-10-24  09:49 PM 發表


In fact, it may produce lots of pollutant when they’re working; on the other hand, it can provide ‘stop-to-stop’ service, which other main transportation system such as railway cannot do it.

其實我覺得呢句好奇怪

dtclaw

原帖由 choy991044 於 2007-10-25  11:26 AM 發表


其實我覺得呢句好奇怪

其實應該擺係introduce the advantages and disadvantages個句之後
咁起碼人地知點解你會講d咁既野
而且,唔係好應該用in fact

有錯請x