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AS i study in Uk ,i have to write personal statement which is the same as Jupas letter.
can anyone help me tackle any problems and give me advice ,it's very urgent.i prepare to apply for Business-related degree.
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  I am eager to take up business-related degree in the university since for me, thinking critically and precisely always makes me willing to think in different dimensions and analyses what was going on. I have confidence to face any challenges and am willing to learn from mistakes. Though things in the business world always change dramatically and fast in the course of time, I think I have potential to fulfill the prerequisites of being a businessman – innovation, creativity and motivation. Only by enhancing the analytic power, establishing insight understanding of business theory and trying to put theories into practice in the university can I consolidate business knowledge and build up my vision on business field.

  While I was in high school in Hong Kong, I tried to get involved in various extra-curricular activities and duties. As a committee of School Student Union, I had organized many events such as school sports day; music competition .etc and involved in process of decision-making of how the events were operated .I also participated in the School Open day to do presentation. Moreover, I was class monitor last two years.

  Besides in school, I had worked as Promoter and Marketing researcher in Hong Kong. All these posts both in school and part-time works gave me sense of responsibility as well as confidence and help me develop the teamwork spirit and communication skills. Besides, I learned how to think logically and systematically, how to carry out a plan effectively and efficiently and how marketing works in a company.

  In my spare time, I keep exercising regularly by playing football, table tennis and swimming, as it can strengthen my body and help me get along with other. And also I understand being healthy is the basis of any brilliant performance and can increase productivity.
  
  Moreover, I enjoy reading various kinds of books since through reading, not only do it enriches my knowledge but also trains me to think critically and thoughtfully. Furthermore, I am also keen on establishing my personal website as it offers me some space to discuss range of my ideas with other.

  Finally, I wish I would have opportunity to enjoy the academic life and the extra-curricular activities in university.
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